“Strunk & White Lost & Found Claims Inspector: The Storage Unit Case”

by | Oct 18, 2020 | Dean Cleaning Two | 7 comments

** Based on Day Two Bonus – “History of Arson” style **

Wreckage of an omelette.
A shaded booth.

Dedication made to an AM radio program.

The DJ hopes it will stir something but the call is actually an exercise
in exalted futility so think instead about that radio ad contest you never
entered.

 

A knowing glance in the direction of eyes that are an untamed bayou.

Ketchup bottle that is a tombstone but not for food but for a brochure from
one of those hotel travel racks.

 

Said brochure is for an amusement park
that closed for unspecified reason.

 

Not unspecified for being unknown, but
for being something that can’t be revealed until the re-enactment cast & crew sign a waiver.

 

The order wheel.   Stainless steel.  Spins like an incognito carousel.

The diner doesn’t know I’m heading toward the next assignment.

7 Comments

  1. David O'Connor

    that can’t be revealed until the re-enactment cast & crew sign a waiver.–this is good, I really like how you are going one extra step with the details, it opens worlds–have you read any George Saunders? (the early stories?) Love the last line.

    • Paul Beckman

      Trent- “Not unspecified for being unknown, but
      for being something that can’t be revealed until the re-enactment cast & crew sign a waiver.” That alone is worth the price of admission.

  2. Tommy Dean

    Love the title! Love the image of the omelette!

    “The DJ hopes it will stir something but the call is actually an exercise
    in exalted futility so think instead about that radio ad contest you never
    entered.” You have an ability to create so much resonance, to just strike right at my heart!

    “Not unspecified for being unknown, but
    for being something that can’t be revealed until the re-enactment cast & crew sign a waiver.” Ha! yes!

    Just so good again!

  3. Constance Malloy

    “Not unspecified for being unknown, but
    for being something that can’t be revealed until the re-enactment cast & crew sign a waiver.”

    This has already been pointed out, but I it is just SO good. You have a great ability to capture landscape and atmosphere very quickly. I envy that. Thanks for sharing your work this weekend.

  4. Roberta Beary

    Good one, Trent.

    Love the playfulness of the title “Strunk and White” and the images: “The order wheel. Stainless steel. Spins like an incognito carousel.”

    Favourite sentence: “The DJ hopes it will stir something but the call is actually an exercise in exalted futility so think instead about that radio ad contest you never entered.”

  5. Christina Rosso-Schneider

    Wow. There are so many amazing lines in this piece! You chose such interesting details to compare.

    Some of my favorites:

    “A knowing glance in the direction of eyes that are an untamed bayou.”

    “Ketchup bottle that is a tombstone but not for food but for a brochure from
    one of those hotel travel racks.”

  6. Trent

    Thanks to all, for your kind words~

    David, interesting you mention GS – I’ve read “Spiderhead” but not some of his other works.
    I often use a fragmented kind of style~

    I figured, based on the taglines for our workshop, at least one piece should relate to the TV shows mentioned.
    I haven’t sorted out what the items under claim are, unless they’re words or something not tangible!

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