“Passive Exploration”

by | Oct 17, 2020 | Dean Cleaning Two | 4 comments

Day Two:  Freedom & Fairness theme.

Here, it’s freedom to be the lone chronicler, of some place.   To make it into something

that lives on.  Or, that’s the idea.  The surroundings belong to no one – so that’s a freedom.

 

 

“Passive Exploration”

The town is an

undocumented extinction event.

 

A blue gel pen

conspires with a marbled composition book

to make the only record of what

inhabited this place.

 

A mottled billboard

A window which

has missed an appointment

or two with the rain.

 

The rain is a custom

cleaning service, except

it visits and lends a service

just as often as it wants to.

 

The billboard might be

from a thrift market back

on the edge of town.

 

An entry could call it a defunct

landmark, only

that word is somehow

too hopeful.

 

Nothing will take its place.

Nothing will will overwrite the freedom

of being a shrine that no one tends.

 

 

A field note may

term the billboard

A rent-a-temptation-

 

Today

Field notes will mark

suffocated sunlight

 

A park that’s a former park

but still a park

Somewhere in it

Ostensibly

A high school planted a time capsule –

 

Tomorrow or some other eventually

 

Field notes could be a marker

When a mimeograph newspaper

coughs up some fossilized gossip.

 

Footsteps/A simulated soundtrack

played with windblown richness.

 

4 Comments

  1. David O'Connor

    A field note may
    term the billboard
    A rent-a-temptation- Love this stanza. Overall, lovely sparse language, red drops on wheelbarrows over and over again, engaging and tender. If I were to expand, not saying you need to, maybe another poem, but I’d start with the objects in the high school time capsule. What would be put in there and who would do the deciding?

    • Paul Beckman

      Trent-Your first two stanzas are so unique they can take a poem anywhere and for me, they could also stand alone.. I like what you did.

  2. Tommy Dean

    “The town is an

    undocumented extinction event.” Whoa is this is great opening! Very interested to see where this takes me!

    Yes to the gel pen and notebook, the way it creates a metaphor of creation!

    “A window which

    has missed an appointment

    or two with the rain.” This line is absolutely gorgeous! I’m so jealous!

    “An entry could call it a defunct

    landmark, only

    that word is somehow

    too hopeful.” Ha! yes, this is perfect! I can visualize this so well!

    suffocated sunlight fantastic!

    And yes to this park! This is really so so good!

  3. Constance Malloy

    I am absolutely in with the first stanza. How does one read that and not want to know what the town looks like and the event that took it there? “Nothing will will overwrite the freedom/of being a shrine that no one tends.” I’m still thinking about everything said and unsaid in these two lines. Wow!

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