Hi All – again, i misunderstood the timing, so apologies for this late entry. i loved all the reading and this exercise.

I combined the epistolary prompt with the “use your imagination” prompt and sort of came up with a hybrid, interrupted letter (started to write it and let it write itself).

You go to write a letter but animals get in the way. Damn homophones always standing in the threshold wearing someone else’s clothes. They fit well enough, but color is slowly roped up in a bucket containing a selkie dress made of sea lion skin and four dipped children complaining about who gets to eat it first, not which is the faster finger clerk. The madness comes later and leaves a short receipt, the kind that queries “what’s a sixpence to whom?” Sitting in front of the fire fives sing to twos about hanging upside down from ashcans, all the while knitting on a softly smiling petal, hoisting itself horizontally (I thought at first in reverence but it was timed to a smoke stack and would not refrain). If I could crackle lingerie, is that an option to take or hold and would you assess the wooden horse with anything else more crayon-like? To consider at this speed seems to me, from this veranda perspective, a tension in breach of contract meaning the surface is calling Tom of Finland to decide who wins. The curdle of it all, and rising! The absolute way sumac can be eight-leaved until it is none. Then what kind of reading would that make for, all skinned to the rope, sounding like each other like this?

8 Comments

  1. Koss Just Koss

    This is brilliant. All of it. “Damn homophones always standing in the threshold wearing someone else’s clothes.” And it has great sonics throughout. Wonderful.

  2. Robert Vaughan

    Hi Adrian, I love the pacing and the playfulness of language choices, Tom of Finland! Yes! So layered like a terrific collage. You might consider having a fragment or two, just so that we don’t have similar lengths of sentences. But that is minuscule in terms of what you do have, which is brilliance! Bravo!

    • Adrian Frandle

      ah, yes, thank you for the feedback. i do tend to ramble, so will look for opportunities to fragment.

  3. David O'Connor

    Adrian, just loved this line: The absolute way sumac can be eight-leaved until it is none. And the whole piece, great work pointing out the details while keeping the momentum of the flow. great writing!

  4. Meg Tuite

    Hi Adrian,
    ” If I could crackle lingerie, is that an option to take or hold and would you assess the wooden horse with anything else more crayon-like?” absolutely LOVE the pacing, the musicality, the wildass beauty of this! So much fun! LOVE IT!

  5. John Steines

    Adrian. Great work. This was a fun read through piled up craziness, still finding a way hold together: ‘The curdle of it all, and rising!’ I could pick out more lines, but that one captures the essence of the complete for me. Very creative. I love how it starts so…plain and simple in a way: ‘You go to write a letter’ then immediately are cast into this dystopia caked in bits of dysphoria: ‘but animals get in the way….’ Love this.

  6. Chelsea Stickle

    “The madness comes later and leaves a short receipt” is my favorite part. The kind of line I’d want to quote to friends. You end on a line that makes me think: “Then what kind of reading would that make for, all skinned to the rope, sounding like each other like this?” All skinned to the rope is great!

  7. Nancy Stohlman

    I just love floating on the linguistic gymnastics here. Like the Cocteau Twins, I’m not sure I care to “make sense” of this, instead prefer this ride on the poignant, melodic nonsense. And even when something “sensible” pops out, it’s quickly re-submerged like a living lava field. Very nice.

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